Comment number one to Lora:
Personally I like how you in the middle of your post stated all of the main parts of Beth's story. As well something that you could of expanded on in your post was your third insight that" It also opened my mind more in the fact that if i am sick that i cant just not admit it to myself i have to take the next step and see a doctor and what i can do to get better." I think you could of expanded this one and go a little deeper and maybe put your self in a practical situation and discuss it a little more. But otherwise for the most part I feel that you gave a good output of your own feelings and insights on the topic.
PS: Watch your grammar and sentence wording in your first paragraph.
Comment number two to Jayson:
Jayson I liked how in your last paragraph you stated how Ms. Wood's presentation pushed you to think about the time we have available with our loved ones and how it could be cut short at any time and we should appreciate it. Although you have a great insight here I would suggest that you elaborate more on your insight by giving a personal example from your own life. Maybe someone in your family has passed away, give an example. To give you an idea of what I mean I try to spend a good amount of time with my grandfather because he's in a declining condition with his breathing problems from old age and smoking. It's something as simple as sharing a small part of your family with others to make a point and I feel that this would bring out your insight in a more vibrant fashion making your writing better.
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